Finished 40 minute script and essay for Audiences

The essay this time was far more what I was used to and I worked very hard to read as much reading material as I could possibly find. I feel I have done a good job on answering the question and I believe, after comparing it to my Images essay, it is a much stronger essay.

The script, after writing two drafts, is clearly the strongest work I have ever written. It is quirky, well-written, enticing, original and has some great characters. The only thing I would say is that the ending isn't as strong as I wish it could be, it feels almost like the beginning of a series. The mystery contained in the film gets no real conclusion, because in the script itu becomes clear that it is not the mystery that is important but how it affects the characters.

Script and essay results

The essay result was as expected but the script was very unfairly marked. First of all the marker claims that my mother character is still stereotypical, which I highly argue with, there is absolutely nothing about her which is stereotypical. The marker claims that she is "saddled" with all the exposition like that she was married for 22 years, this isn't exposition in my eyes; I mean I don't know how long my parents were married. Further to that ther marker says that the framing device used isn't good, even though in our tutorials she said it was good. Generally the ending let me down as well, which I can accept.